At Terezin
"When a new child comes
"When a new child comes
Everything seems strange to him.
What on the ground I have to lie?
Eat black potatoes? No! Not I!
I've got to stay? It's dirty here!
The floor-why look, it's dirt, I fear!
And I'm supposed to sleep on it?
I'll get all dirty!
Here the sound of shouting, cries,
And oh, so many flies.
Everyone knows flies carry disease.
Oooh, something bit me! Wasn't that a bedbug?
Here in Terezin, life is hell
I like how on your butterfly you put colors to give me a depressing dark mood about what you did. A good part are the quotes you put and pictures to symbolize things like their hate for the Jews. I think the butterfly is good except for some of the writing on the darker colors it hard to read what it says.
ReplyDeleteYour butterfly is good don't get that wrong but are some things you could have done to make your butterfly much better. When you are taking the picture of the butterfly you should have put it in area with more light. I couldn't see the brown part of the butterfly and the tags showed that there was more stuff that I couldn't see. Speaking of tags, you could have put a little more effort into the tags. They kinda like they were rushed and you could have done better but I like the effort you put into your butterfly. It doesn't look like it is rushed and it looks like you put a lot of man hours into the butterfly. Good job, but you could had done better.
ReplyDeleteThe butterfly was good, but there can be some improvements. An area that you could have improved in was the writing on the brown part of the butterfly, I really couldn't see the writing. Another thing that can improved are your tags, it looks like you tried to put effort into your tags but it seems that you rushed. Other than that you did a good job on your butterfly.
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ReplyDeleteYour butterfly explains the symbolism with the pictures and colors in many ways. The only improvement I suggest is if you explained all your tags more thoughtfully and with more effort. Your butterfly does actually match with your poem, and I can see that many words, phrases, and paragraph in the poem could be added into your tags. Over all your butterfly looks great, just fix the errors and I'm sure it will have a better out come on other people who look at it as well.
ReplyDeleteI feel like you didn't put that much effort or thought into what you put down. Although your butterfly looks good but it's quality over quantity
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